Experiment in the Bare Bones of Storytelling : Pirates of the Caribbean Sequel Trilogy, part 2

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Tent-PostsI explained the theory of “tent-poles” in Part 1: What makes a powerful story is simply having tent-poles in the three spatial dimensions of setting, character, and theme plus the temporal dimension of plot. Little snippets of imagery for setting, dialogue/interaction for character, ideas sprinkled here and there for theme, and diagrammed events to sketch out a plot are enough.

Even if the language draped over these tent-poles is mediocre, the story will carry readers along. Take Dan Brown or George R. R. Martin as examples.

I think writers instinctively set up tent-poles when sketching out their narratives, but it helps immensely to understand the types of tent-poles. Miss one of these types, and the sketch suffers. Miss several, and you’re sketching a crap story. It also pays to keep them in mind when writing an effective summary for your query letter.

And a story blurb? Check out this format: “In a world where … [setting] … one man/woman must … [character+plot] … but can he/she do this and also … [plot+theme]?” The tent-poles are right there.

As an example, in Part 1 set up these tent-poles for the first of a hypothetical sequel trilogy in the Pirates of the Caribbean franchise. I wanted to use a world familiar to most readers so the absence of little details would not stand in the way. After you take a peek at Part 1, check out the tent-pole sketches for the next film:

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Another designer’s rather anemic, confused vision of US rail

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OneAmericaRailIf you’re a regular reader, you might be familiar with my One America vision for US rail.

The best (and only) website founded by people who used to run a propaganda mill and a fake newspaper, upworthy.com, is promoting a very anemic and simplified improvement plan that seems more like a band-aid plan than visionary. Isn’t this supposed to be a progressive site?

The name of the plan? “United States High Speed Rail System.” It certainly is … ummm … accurate. I guess we could call it US HS RS for short.

The US HS RS plan uses my color-scheming idea (nice…) but fails to connect the entire country by threading new lines between population centers through the emptier parts of the country. Rail development precedes settlement, not the other way around, so connecting only the populated parts of the country is remarkably backward and ignorant of the history of rail.

On the other hand, US HS RS inexplicably ends the high-speed rail line from Boston in Quincy, Illinois, instead of extending it to Kansas City ; are they expecting a lot of Quincy-to-Quincy travel? Another high-speed line connects Juarez, Chihuahua, with Cheyenne, Wyoming. Really?

When you absolutely have to get from a moderately populated Mexican state to the least populated American state as quickly as possible!

By neglecting lines connecting hub cities through less developed towns (thus reminding the inhabitants of those hub cities of those towns, and making overnight-stay business a possibility) while weirdly ending lines in low-population destinations like Cheyenne and Quincy, US HS RS offers a worst-of-both-worlds scenario. It’s a recipe for failure.

Worst of all, the plan shuns Canada’s midsection while connecting to Tijuana, Juarez, and Monterrey in Mexico. Now, I’ve got nothing against Mexico, but you don’t have to work for the border patrol or the Drug Enforcement Agency to understand how problematic running commuter trains across our southern border would be. It would be nice to eventually have satellite stations one or two cities deep for our tropical neighbors, but lots of economic, legal, and security challenges would need to be overcome first.

I’ll stick with my plan.

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An Experiment In The Bare Bones Of Storytelling – Pirates of the Caribbean Sequel Trilogy, Part 1

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pirate-JNLThis is going to be one part writing advice, one part literary theory, and several parts fan fiction to show how it all works.

Back in 2011, I had been thinking a lot about what goes into crafting a good story.  Particularly, I had been struck by how awful the 1978 film adaptation of Chandler‘s The Big Sleep was, despite keeping the original plot structure, and how good the 1946 film was despite draining much of the force of the book’s plot with a Hollywoodized climax.  The Bogart version succeeded, I suspect, partly due to better casting and more faithful adherence to the original witty dialogue.

Also, while reading Bukowski‘s Pulp, I realized the power of wit in driving a story even when structure is weak or absent. Then, the worst of the Pirates of the Caribbean films (so far) was released on DVD.  Lots to think about, and it led to the realization that there are essentially four dimensions of story-telling.

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Two simple steps to better open-world video games

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GamingWe’re getting ready to get the computing smack-down laid on our gamer brains by a new generation of consoles, including the Wii U, the Playstation 4, and the Xbox One.

I know each of these platforms already has a boatload of games in the works, but nevertheless I’d like to offer my two cents to 8th Generation game designers, specifically on how to make better open-world games.

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Pirates of Barack Obama

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In honor of Talk Like a Pirate Day, I’m uploading the entire run of my web comic based on the reverse idea: taking images of pirates (specifically screen-shots from the POTC movies) and adding actual quotes from president Barack Obama, tweaked only slightly to match the mannerisms of the characters.

These are meant neither to be pro-Obama or anti-Obama, but merely for the surreal humor.

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If DC wants to become a state, it should start acting like one

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DC-flagStatehood is a perennial issue in the District of Columbia, along with full enfranchisement of the residents of DC. It’s not for nothing that the District’s license place bear the motto “Taxation Without Representation.” Unlike other Americans, citizens of DC have no effective vote in Congress.

Interesting how all those Tea Party activists protesting in the District never made a big deal out of the taxation without representation right in front of their faces.

But, beyond all of the partisan politics behind adding a 51st star to the flag (DC is notoriously left-leaning and Democratic), a huge stumbling block in the DC statehood struggle is the fact that DC does not look or sound like a state.

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Bad science, bad sci-fi, and why Voyager is not leaving the solar system

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scifiIf you are one of my close friends, I apologize, because you have heard this rant so many times over the past year that I am probably lucky we’re still acquaintances.

Despite what you might have heard in the news, Voyager is not “leaving the solar system.” It’s leaving the heliosphere, the tiny region of the solar system that is dominated by the solar wind.

To say Voyager is leaving the solar system by leaving the solar wind is like saying someone left the United States by stepping outside the White House. In short, it’s stupid, incorrect, and unscientific. Which explains why so many professional science journalists are saying it.

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How to frame frame-story stories – Top Five pointers!

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Xzibit-1001NightsI have been pinged1 a few times lately by fans who are a little miffed2 that I rescinded publication of The Ligan of the Disomus so I could finish the book that precedes it in the Observer’s Casebook series. Why is the first book taking so long? Part of the explanation is that I’ve been working on other projects, including the 2nd edition of On The Head Of A Pin, a few serial pieces, and bits of theater (including a short play that was spontaneously performed at a recent Submit 10 event!).

But, the core reason is that The Crow and the Kinnebeck is a nested tale, otherwise known as a frame story or “story within a story.” A writer has to be extra careful spinning this sort of yarn. Let me describe the dynamics of the frame story, then offer a Top Five list of pointers for writers ambitious enough to attempt a complex nested narrative.

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Proposal – The National Museum of Sail

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NMS-iconAhoy! My latest design sketch, draft, or preliminary concept once again falls into the broad “civil planning” category.

I propose a new Smithsonian museum dedicated to the history of sail. Although this might seem like a niche subject, not only does the history of sailing cover the majority of human history and the majority of the Earth’s surface, but the United States was conceived and born through the power of sail. Such a huge chunk of our vocabulary is derived from the culture of sail that there are entire dictionaries devoted to etymologically nautical words and phrases, like Peter D. Jeans’s Ship to Shore: A Dictionary of Everyday Words and Phrases Derived from the Sea.

In this proposal (really just a fun blog post) I’ll talk about why America’s early maritime history is important, and the interesting features such a museum could have, including graphic depictions.

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Odd Thought on Insect Noir

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OddThoughtsMARLOWE: “I don’t mind your ritzing me, or drinking your lunch.”

BUTTERFLY: “Uh, dude, I’m a butterfly. We have to drink all of our meals.”

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